Talk:Herobrine Minecraft Encounter/@comment-5620658-20140207233308

It's off to a good start but I think it needs to be longer, a few paragraphs (and additionally break the first one up a bit.) Also it needs more build up but the idea is good. Don't rush into the herobrine bit too quickly, describe your reactions to herobrine a bit more, go into more detail. Shock, horror, frozen to the spot? Vary sentance lengths...wow, I sound like my English teacher.